Another story for glories here!
By: Bicyclecat
“Class, focus ! The play is in two weeks!” Mrs. Wheelie says in a hurry.
Mrs. Wheelie scurries around the classroom.
Mrs. Wheelie is our acting teacher. I don’t know why I signed up for this class.
“How are the costumes coming, Willam?!” asks Mrs. Wheelie.
“The Alice costume is almost done, but the Queen of Hearts costume is not so- “ Willam is cut off.
“Willam I gave you this job knowing you would be the best for it; don’t make me change my mind!” Mrs. Wheelie seems like she is running around the classroom now.
She runs to my desk, where Sarah and I sit.
We’re working on the props. Since we’re doing Alice in Wonderland we will need lots of props.
“Zuri and Sarah, how are these props going”? she asks.
Sarah looks at me. The props are fine, not great. But we know that if we tell Mrs. Wheelie she will freak.
“Um…” I start to say.
“We’re almost done!” Sarah says. Her voice is small.
“Wow! I’m so proud of you two!” Mrs. Wheelie says.
“Sarah, why did you do that!?” I whisper into her ear.
We’re not even close to being done.
Sarah gives me a smile that has a big ‘Sorry” across it.
“Oh, Sarah!’’ I say to her.
Mrs. Wheelie looks at me from Willam’s desk.
“What?” asks Mrs. Wheelie.
Willam sticks out his tongue.
“We were just talking.” I say.
“There is no talking in this class, talking is for lunch or after school.” Mrs. Wheelie says with a strict look.
Sarah looks at me.
“We should get back to work.” I say.
“Yep.” Says Sarah, already starting to make a cover for one of the books that will be falling with Alice when she goes down the hole.
I make the back cover for the book she is making.
After school, we work together in Sarah’s room to finish all the props. In the morning I almost forget to get up. Sarah wakes me up. “C’mon! We gotta go to school!” she says in my ear.
Sarah lets me wear her clothes. I am really happy Sarah is friends with me. When I came here from India, she was the only kid who wanted to be friends with me. I watch Sarah put her long brown hair into a braid. She puts my black hair into a ponytail.
Sarah wears an overalls with a green shirt.
I put on a dress with birds and flowers all over with purple leggings.
We high five.
“I love the look!” Sarah says.
“I hope Mrs. Wheelie likes our props,” I say.
“Hey, you have dark circles under your eyes, Zuri.” Sarah says.
“You do, too!” I say.
We laugh together.
“Girls, time to go!” Sarah’s Mom says.
“Okay, Mom,” Sarah says
“We just need to pack up all the props,” I say.
(More next time! BYE)
Bicycle Cat Blog 
Love it and can’t wait to hear what happens next! I was actually in Alice in Wonderland in 5th grade. I originally wanted to be Alice and was disappointed that I didn’t get the part, but ended up really loving my part: the Queen of Hearts. I got to yell, “Off with their heads!” and act really mean and scary. So anyway, I love that your characters are working on this play. I can’t tell if the teacher is kind of mean or just really stressed out, but I bet I will find out!
Love, Amy
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There will be more of this on Friday!
I can relate! In second grade( at my old school) There was going to be a play. It was Snow White. I can’t remember what I original was trying out for, But I got to play the evil queen. Good for me.
Thanks
BicycleCat/Js
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Julia!
Thanks for sending the first part of a new story. Some observations:
1. You used a lot of short sentences in this story. Dialogue between friends, I suppose. But perhaps you had another reason or two for that format. 2. I wonder if you are able to check the meaning of the names you assign to characters. âZuriâ, for example. Just curiousâ¦. 3. You have a sense of when to stop with one part of the story before moving on to the next part. I think thatâs called âepisodicâ â and episode is like one part of life, or like a chapter. But it also is a way to frame one segment of an overall experience, capturing it in time.
Some questions:
1. Did this story get written more quickly than others? 2. Will Mrs. Wheelie (clever name!) become an understandable or likeable person as time goes on? 3. The same question about William. 4. How do you decide WHEN to reveal important details? In this story, we find out that the speaker/writer is from India, but not right away. (Thatâs a nice techniqueânot revealing everything about everyone right away. Keeping us guessing for a little while.0 5. How are you doing otherwise?
Sorry I didnât respond right away. I hope you are having a good weekend. Ours is gloomy-ish, but the rain is making all of the natural world very happy â our yard is very green right now, and last yearâs flowers are pushing aside the dirt to find their place in the sun. Cloudy/cold days are good ones for thinking and writing, right?
Enjoy the weekend, and keep writing!
Grandpa Bob
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Thank you for the questions and feedback!
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